viernes, 4 de marzo de 2011

Narrative Paragraph 9th Grade

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  1. Narrative Paragraph
    My Apendix Operation
    (One month ago, on January 27th I went on an appendix operation.) Since 3 days ago I was having pain on my stomach but I decided to do not said something because maybe it was just a passenger pain; but it never went away so on Thursday my mother took me to the hospital .**When I got there the doctors told me they should make me some exams like:
    1. X-Ray
    2. Ultrasound
    3. Blood Exam**
    After all the exams the Surgeon told me I’ve got to enter to operation. But before they put me on my hand a needle that passes serum to my body. That night they operated me and they also found a cyst. On the morning of Friday I was with a lot of pain and in the afternoon I stared to walk. On the morning of Saturday I went out of the hospital and in afternoon my family and friends came to my house to visit me. They gave me ballons, candies and lots of things more especially love. I stayed home during one week. Then I started school again but without exercising. --Finally I am okay; it is a good learning experience even though it might hurt.--
    () Topic Sentence
    ***Supporting Details
    -- Coclusion

    Maria Jose Garzaro
    2do Basico I

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  2. TOPIC SENTENCE:
    One day we went on a trip with my family to Rio Dulce and it was very nice for severla (reasons).
    SUPPORTING DETAILS:
    First we arrived to a restaurant where we ate shrimps. Then we took a lot of pictures from the best moments. Finally we saw some kids that were catching fish near the river.
    CONCLUDING SENTENCE:
    This trip was the best one I ever had.

    ( ) controlling idea
    Adriana Cojulun
    2.3

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  3. narrative paragraph

    I IN THE USA
    (when I went to he USA) I was so nervious and happy because I go to {see my sister.}
    1 firs thing that I Ndid was ask for my sister. 2 second was visite my cousings from NY was fonny because every time that we were together we paly a lot of games.3finally the las day that i was in the USA I was so sad because I didnt go to see my family again.
    [but I hnow that one day I going to visete my family again.]

    ()topic sentence
    {}controling idea
    []conclusoion

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  4. The best trip
    INTRODUCTION:
    On 2009 I visited Jalapa with the volleyball team because we were invited to the national volleyball´s match.
    TOPIC SENTENCE:
    We needed to get ready for the final match so we followed these (routine).
    SUPPORTING DETAILS:
    First, we woke up at 5:00 am. We took a bath and got ready with the uniform.
    Then, we ate breakfast with different teams.
    After a while, we started training with a partner so the coach just gided us.
    fianlly, after a hard workout, we won the first place of the national volleyball´s match.
    CONCLUDING SENTENCE:
    I really enjoyed this trip because we worked together as a team and also because now we are the national champions.

    () controlling idea
    Maria Fernanda Orellana.
    code: 13
    2.1

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  5. Fashion

    TOPIC SENTENCE
    The world is fashion, absolutly. If your favorite topic is fashion, and you want to be a fashion girl please follow these (CONTROLLING IDEA)---->steps.

    SUPORTING DETAILS
    First, you have to know how your body is and which colth fits nice to you and which one doesn’t.
    Also, you must make a list with all your favorite designers, to buy from them.
    Then, you have to keep money, which is very important beacuase without money there’s no cloth.
    After that, travel around the worl or just visitt fashion cities like New York, and buy everything you want.

    CONCLUDING IDEA:
    In conlusion, these tips are very important, and you should follow them step by step, to be a fashionable woman!

    Melissa Mazariegos
    2.1

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  6. Topic sentece
    When I was around 4 years old, my parents gave me teddy bears of all kind of sizes.They were a lot, so my mom decided to put them in a furniture.(I got hurt)

    Suporting details

    First I went to play with my sister we were playing that we were moms.
    Second we thought the big teddy bears could be our babies.
    Then my mom was busy, but I really wanted them.So I started to climb the furniture like they were stairs.Suddenly the furniture fell on top of me.
    After that I started to scream and cry.I was trapped inside one of the shelves divisions, so I just hurt my leg.

    Conlcuding idea
    At the end of the day my parents scolded me for be so mischievous.

    anDy Lai
    2.3

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  7. All kind of sizes

    Topic sentece
    When I was around 4 years old, my parents gave me teddy bears of all kind of sizes.They were a lot, so my mom decided to put them in a furniture.(I got hurt)

    Suporting details

    First I went to play with my sister we were playing that we were moms.
    Second we thought the big teddy bears could be our babies.
    Then my mom was busy, but I really wanted them.So I started to climb the furniture like they were stairs.Suddenly the furniture fell on top of me.
    After that I started to scream and cry.I was trapped inside one of the shelves divisions, so I just hurt my leg.

    Conlcuding idea
    At the end of the day my parents scolded me for be so mischievous.

    anDy Lai
    2.3

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  8. Oatmeal

    TOPIC SENTENCE:
    If you want to (prepare some oatmeal) follow this "steps":()topic , ""controlling idea.

    1.First,you collect all the ingredients: aots, butter,cinnamon, eggs, flour, salt, sugar, brown sugar, and nutmeg.
    2.Second, mix all the ingredients with a mixer.
    3.Next, you freeze all the mix like a roll wax paper for a day.
    4.Then, you take out the mix and you cut it in small pieces.
    5.Finally, you put it in the oven to 175ºC for 10 minutes.
    (1., 2., 3., 4., 5.,SUPORTING DETALIS.)

    CONCLUDING SENTENCES:
    And now that the cookies are cooked you can taste a delicious oatmeal with a glass of milk.

    Maria Renee Vaides 9th grade 1

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  9. Oatmeal

    TOPIC SENTENCE:
    If you want to (prepare some oatmeal) follow this "steps":()topic , ""controlling idea.

    1. First, you collect all the ingredients: oats, butter, cinnamon, eggs, flour, salt, sugar, brown sugar, and nutmeg.
    2. Second, mix all the ingredients with a mixer.
    3. Next, you freeze all the mix like a roll wax paper for a day.
    4. Then, you take out the mix and you cut it in small pieces.
    5. Finally, you put it in the oven to 175ºC for 10 minutes.
    (1. 2., 3. 4. 5., SUPORTING DETALIS.)

    CONCLUDING SENTENCES:
    And now that the cookies are cooked you can taste a delicious oatmeal with a glass of milk.

    Maria Renee Vaides 9th grade 1

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  10. Drive a car!
    attention getter
    How you ever get nervous when driving a car?

    topic sentence
    This is the description of the day tha I drove a car.

    supporting sentences
    At first,I was so nervous because I recenthy learn to drive a car.second,when I sit on the chair of the car I was so worry because I will drive.then I on the car and I want to scream!
    It was so fun!Next, I start to drive.Finally,i feel so proud with me and with a lot of satisfaction.

    conclusion
    In conclusion is that I don`t have to be nervous.
    Nathalie Carrillo Godoy
    2do 2
    code 3

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  11. Vacations:
    [INTRODUCTION]
    Have you ever been to a place where your dreams can come true? Where nobody tells you what to do, what to say, or what to think? Well I’ve been, and let me tell you how amazing it is.
    [SUPPORTING DETAILS]
    I went to Chicago when I was 14 years old. It was such a surprise for me because I wasn’t expecting anything at all. I went to Chicago on November 17th of 2010. There I founded my uncle Gilberto, who went to Chicago when I was six years old. He didn’t come back to Guatemala and we all missed him, and watching him after eight years was one of the best things I’ve experienced since I have memory.
    I had a great time doing several things. My favorite activity was going to the mall, in which I bought in my favorite, clothe stores like: Abercrombie, Hollister, American Eagle, Old Navy, etc. I also went to the best bookstore ever: Borders. There I bought two of my three Muse’s CD’s: Origin of Symmetry and Black Holes and Revelations. I also went to Milwaukee, Wisconsin.
    My favorite place in the whole Chicago was the Down Town. There I went to the famous Sears Tower, now Willis Tower. It is a magical place, really is so beautiful… I also went to the Winter Wonder Fest, in the Navy Pier. I had a great time with my family: Gilberto my uncle; Ana Maria my aunt; Paola and Isabella my cousins, and Esperanza my Granny. I didn’t want to leave Chicago because it is my favorite place in the whole world…
    [CONCLUDING SENTENCE]
    Chicago is a great place to visit, very recommendable and beautiful. Hope that you go there one day.


    Isabel Lemus, 9th grade I
    code: 10 :)

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  12. The Falling
    TOPIC SENTENCE: Taking a Bath!!!
    Did you ever made something that herts you, because of your desesperation?
    Well here is my story, the one that teach me a great and paintful lesson:
    When I was a little girl, about 3 years old, I was taking a bath with my grand-ma.
    She take me out, put me my coat and she sat me in the toillet.
    At First, she told me that she would come back with my shoes, and I gor desperate, so I tied to get down, but she listened to me and told me that I would hurt myself. I didn´t listen her, and I decided to do it. When I did it, I fell down and skated on the floor and I crushed with the sink, huting mu toe.
    After that, I started crying and screaming. My grand-ma hilled me and cut one of my favorite socks to lend my finger out,

    CONCLUDING SENTENCE:
    That experience is always in my mind, because teached me the importance of being obedient.

    CRISTINA RUIZ AMRIN
    9th 1
    CODE: 16

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  13. A Nice Day

    Introduction:
    Have you ever been to a lake? Fishing at the lake proved to be an enjoyable activity for Wally and his family.
    Supporting Details or Body:
    All the family woke up early in the morning excited because they were going to the lake. Wally's mom packed all the food, and his dad checked the car to make certain it was all right. When the family arrived to the lake, they stopped by the store to buy some worms to use as bait. They went walking to the side of the lake in which they were going to fish. Wally and his brother went to the center of the lake to see if they could catch something. Without luck they decided to move to another side of the lake.
    After snagging lines several times, Wally's brother caught the first fish. Wally helped him. They went to the shore to put the fish in a bucket they had with them. Their parents were sitting at the picnic table watching the view. After a couple of hours, they started packing up for the trip home.
    Conclusion:
    The activity was great fun for the whole family. Wally's family is hoping for a return trip before next Spring break.

    Introduction: Attention Getter: Have you ever been to a lake?

    Topic Sentence: Fishing: topic
    Activity: controlling idea.

    Alejandra Rodas Calderón
    9th grade II
    Code: 15

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  14. MUSIC
    <> There are a lot of types <> of music <>.

    <>
    I love listening music.The music that i listen is pop in English and electronic.If you are choosing the type of music that you want, first, you have to listen all the types of music that are in the world, differents songs with differnet rhythm.Second you can eliminate the songs and types that you don`t like.And finally, you can only hear the songs and types of music that you want.

    <>
    on conclusion, music is an art to our ears and there for all types of tastes.

    Gaby Velasquez Milian
    9th 2
    CODE:19

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  15. MUSIC
    TOPIC SENTENCE There are a lot of types CONTROLLING IDEA of music.TOPIC
    SUPPORTING DETAILS
    I love listening music.The music that i listen is pop in English and electronic.If you are choosing the type of music that you want, first, you have to listen all the types of music that are in the world, differents songs with differnet rhythm.Second you can eliminate the songs and types that you don`t like.And finally, you can only hear the songs and types of music that you want.

    CONCLUDING SENTENCE
    on conclusion, music is an art to our ears and there for all types of tastes.

    Gaby Velasquez Milian
    9th 2
    CODE:19

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  16. Girls don´t forget that I asked for Narrative Paragraphs, only!!

    Ms. Celeste

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  17. Music: I would like to tell you something about music MUSIC IS LIFE! Most of the music tell how you feel, what you think,what you would like to say.MY favorite kind of music is: electronic,R&B,pop,etc.When I listen to music I feel like all the world stops and I can say whatever I want.Music makes people happy and can join people.This is what I think about music.

    Topic sentence: Music is life.
    Concluding sentence: Music makes people happy and can join people.
    Suporting Details: Most of the music tell how you feel,what you think,what you would like to say.


    Ma.Fernanda Pereira
    9th 2
    CODE:12

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  18. SHOES
    ATTENTION GETTER: Have you ever look carefully at every pair of shoes you have?
    TOPIC SENTENCE: There are many different (styles) of . ()controling idea <> topic
    BODY: Shoes can be classify by climate, colors, styles and so many other ways. Boots are one style of shoes, they're usually use for winter.
    Sandals are the opposite, they're usually use for summer. Heels are usually use for partys or especial events. Sport shoes, more known as tenis, are use for going to the gym or they can be use to stay in home, too. Slippers are use to for casual cloth! This are some styles of shoes we usually use.
    CONCLUSION:In conclusion everyone have different styles of shoes.


    IRINA CARDONA
    CODE:2
    9TH. GRADE 2

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  19. My ballet presentation

    TOPIC SENTENCE:
    Every year in my academy, we make a presentation of ballet on National Theater:

    SUPPORTING DETAILS:
    First, all the people arrived to de Theater to watch our presentation
    Then, the presentation began, and all the Theater was full.
    Next, the presentation continue until it ends
    And last, all the people claps to us because of our fabulous presentation

    CONCLUDING SENTENCE:
    Like I enjoy my ballet presentations, I hope you enjoy your activities, I hope too you gave the oportunitie to go and see me dance ballet.

    HILLARY MELENDEZ
    9th grade I
    CODE:12

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  20. White Collar
    ATTENTION GETTER
    Fox has many tv series, which they all are interesting, I like one in particular, its name is ''White Collar.''
    TOPIC SENTENCE
    White Collar has a interesting story.
    TOPIC: White Collar
    CONTROLLING IDEA: story
    BODY
    First, the protagonist named Neil Cafrey, which is a famous thief of art, is cought by a FBI agent, named Peter Burke. When he was in jail his love, Kate, arrived and said something to him that no one except Neil really gets to know. Neil accepted to work for the FBI, in order to take an angle from his freedom: find Kate. After a lot of resolved crimes and searching for Kate, helped with the important support from his friend, Mozzie, and some clues Kate left him such as: morse code and a message in a bottle, Neil finally found someone that maybe can help him finding Kate. This person gave him some clues of who was the responsible of this problem. After giving his part of the deal, Neil was going to the airplain where Kate was( they could see each other)suddenly, Peter intervened and kept Neil off of the airplane a bit more, without any clue, it exploded. Now, Neil has to find out who killed Kate and wanted to kill him, he will need a lot of help.
    CONCLUSION
    This story has a lot to figure out. I am sure all the future seasons will be so interesting, just like this one. I will not miss a chapter hope you neither.

    Pamela Azurdia
    2.2.
    Code 1

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  21. MY BIRTHADAY
    Topic Sentence:
    The last yaer I have a very nice birthday for several (reasons).
    SUPPORTING DETAILS:
    First,I wake up an everyone tells me "happy birthday"
    Then,My family gave me a big cake and a lot of gifts.
    Finally, we went to dinner to my favorite restaurant.
    CONCLUSION
    It dosen't matter how many present my family gave to me if I'm with them everithing is fine.

    Shirley Minera
    2ndo 3
    code 10

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  22. MY TRIP TO L.A
    Topic Sentece:
    When I travel to LA I have an unforgetable memories for several reasons.
    SUPPROTING DETAILS
    First, I arrived to the airport of Los angeles ,I was nervous but my uncle was waiting for me.
    Then, My uncle take me to dinner.
    Finally, My uncle take me to Disneyland.
    CONCLUSION:
    I spend a relly good time with my family of LA and I hope I will see them againg some day.

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  23. MY TRIP TO L.A
    Topic Sentece:
    When I travel to LA I have an unforgetable memories for several reasons.
    SUPPROTING DETAILS
    First, I arrived to the airport of Los angeles ,I was nervous but my uncle was waiting for me.
    Then, My uncle take me to dinner.
    Finally, My uncle take me to Disneyland.
    CONCLUSION:
    I spend a relly good time with my family of LA and I hope I will see them againg some day.

    Monica Daniel
    2ndo 2
    code 6

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  24. When I lived in the U.S.A there was lots of great thing I did, here there are.(t,s)
    First my sister's birthday was always at the park.(supporting detail 1)Then, my dad took us to Disney World, Sea World, Disney Animal Kingdom, the only place he didn't take us was MGM Studios.(suporting detail 2)Finally I went to Forest Hill Elementry School I had lots of friends.(suparting detail 3)
    In conclusion I had a wonderful time in the USA the time that I lived there.(concluding sentence)
    maria rene santa cruz
    2.3 code 15

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  25. When I Traveled to LA CA

    Introduction
    Had you ever been travel? On december of 2010 I had the oportunity to travel to LA ca.
    Was my second time to travel in the airplane so I was excited.

    Supporting Details (Body)
    My grandmother, my sister and I was nervous for the big moment (when the airplane arrive) and the big moment came. I remember that was that moment so especial for me.
    Then we arrived to LA after two hours in the plane.
    A uncle was waiting for us in the airport, after in the hotel we sleep until the next day because when we came were 4:00 a.m. can you imagine that? so we just sleep 3 hours, but I don´t care I was in LA a dream come true.
    The next day, Sunday we went to Hollywood. From 10:00 a.m to 8:30 p.m was a day for shopping and meet a beatiful places close to Hollywood.
    Monday, In Santa Monica Promenade, Santa Monica Pier
    was amazing we were in Santa Monica Promenade when we meet a new mall that is called Santa Monica wuau! was incredible.
    Tuesday, We was so happy because we were in Universal Studios and was an amazing day because I went up to many atractions. Then in that day we walk in City Walk.
    Wendsday, Oh my God, the dream of a child, go to Disneyland
    this was my second time to was there and this not was the exception I can feel again like little girl. I saw Mikey and all his friends. The day sadly had to end.
    Thursday was day of shopping too but these time, we went to Los Callejones All is more inexpensive there.
    The travel had to end because that day Thursday we had to return to Guatemala.

    Conclusion
    Travel is a wonderful experience, Because you meet a new people, places, cultura and I personally to practice a language.

    Paula Pamela Ramirez Santizo
    9th grade II
    Code 13

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  26. MY BIRTHADAY
    Topic Sentence:
    The last year I had a very nice birthday for several (reasons).
    SUPPORTING DETAILS:
    First,I woke up an everyone tells me "happy birthday"
    Then,My family gave me a big cake and a lot of gifts.
    Finally, we went to dinner to my favorite restaurant.
    CONCLUSION
    It dosen't matter how many present my family gave to me if I'm with them everithing is fine.

    shirley minera
    2ndo 3
    code 10

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  27. I IN THE USA.
    TOPIC SENTENCES
    When I wnt to the USA I was so nervios and happy for several (reasons).
    SUPPORTING DETAILS
    First I was going to see my sister.
    Second I was going to see my cousins from NY.
    Finally I was going to visite New York.
    CONCLUSION
    In NY all was fantastic but the next time I wanna go to L.A

    lourdes recinos
    2.3
    code 11

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  28. Take care of a baby:
    Take care of baby´s is very important because they are especial little things that have to care carefully of them , if you are bad whit your baby he never going to love you so follow these types for how to care your child.
    You have to give a lot of love
    When the baby is so little you don’t have to give to kids
    You have to give a good food
    Wash him/her every day until is cold

    Now if you follow these types you are going to be a good mother, but remember be mother is not ESSY.

    kristy iilescas
    code.8
    9grade2

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  29. My trip to Antigua
    TOPIC SENTENCE :
    Several weeks ago I went to Antigua with all my family.
    SUPPORTING DETAILS:
    We stay in the hotel Soley until Sunday it was a lot of fun. I get on the pool in the night and it was SO COLD. Then I go with my cousin to the restaurant to get the diner. Next we go to the sport bar, One one guy start singing all the night.
    CONCLUDING SENTENCE:
    The sunday we go back home, it was a nice weekend.

    Karen Enriquez
    clave: 6
    2do. 3

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  30. My trip to Costa Rica

    Topic Sentences:
    a few weeks ago
    I took a trip to Costa Rica with my father
    Suporting Details:
    In the airplane i stay sleep
    my father awake up me when mi were in C.R
    we stay in the house of my uncle for 2 weeks,we go to a lot of places like the zoo.
    I meet a lot of people
    Concluding Sentence:
    I and my father go back to guatemala,was one of my favorite trips.


    Eliza vindas
    2.1
    Code: 19

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  31. My vacations
    Topic sentence:
    In the vacations I go to Peten.
    Suporting Details:
    I meet "El Gran Jaguar" and I saw a lot of animals in Tikal. That was my favorite place that I visited in my trip. The bad part is that I got sick of the stomach but I was with my family so I got better when they started to gave me my medicine. I went to with my uncle and a friend of him that was from Netherlands. So I practice my English.
    Concluding sentence:
    Without I got sick, I had fun and a lot of photographs to remember that trip and I am happy of that.
    Rebeca Melgar
    2.2
    code: 11

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  32. Paula Izquierdo
    Code:9
    9th grade 2
    NARRATIVE PARAGRAPH

    How to make cookies?

    Making "cookies" consists on having alot of (ingredients).
    The ingredients you need are:
    -Flour
    -Butter
    -Eggs
    -Water
    -Pouder

    {First,you need to put the flour and the pouder together and mixed it all and put the water.
    Second,you put the eggs wuth all the mixture you made before and mixed it.
    Third,you melt the butter and you mixed it with the mixture you did before.
    Next,you make the shapes you want with the mixture.
    And finally,you bake it and enjoy them.}

    =So try to make your own cookies and enjoy them! They are delicious!=

    "" Topic
    () Controlling Idea
    {} Supporting Details
    == Conclusion

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  33. My Trip to Florida

    TOPIC SENTENCE >
    One of my best trips to Florida was on October 2007, I was 11 years-old.
    BODY >
    EVENT 1
    We went to the airport early that day with my sister, my parents and I, that was a cold day. We enter to the airplane and after a few minutes began the departure. The flight lasted 2 hours and 20 minutes.
    EVENT 2
    When we were there my father rent a car and then we go directly to the hotel. That day I was very exhausted, so we didn't go to any park of Disney.
    EVENT 3
    The next day we get up early and we go to the park "Epcot" (my favorite one). We had a lot of fun there! Even it is a huge park. Some things we do there was to go to the biggest and newest roller coaster "Everest". Some other things I remember was that people was making scenes of shows or movies, and everybody was looking and asking 'what was going on?'.
    CONCLUDING SENTENCE >
    That was one of my best days I ever had.

    Sofia Ruiz Rosal
    code 14
    2.3

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